K的工作与学习

For type of treatment which should be available in our new healthcare scheme, my comment is as below:(x>>y)(>>The following is my comment regarding health treatment in our new healthcare scheme. )
I suggest using (VT)(>>to use)alternative treatment. The reason is very simple, the most (x>>y)(>>. Most of)of (I(x))(>>the)employee (PL)(>>employees)is Chinese in our company, and these employees would accept the alternative medicine easier than the western medicine. For example, in our city, more and more people would like to go to massage parlor and have finger-pressing massage. Massage becomes popular that people believe it can (VT)(>>does )not only treating (VT)(>>treat)some of diseases, but (I(x))(>>it)also reducing (VT)(>>reduces)stress from job, family, (I(x))(>>matters, and)ect(SP)(>>etc).

Overall Teacher Comments

Dear Student, Thank you for submitting your writing. The content of your writing is good and interesting to read. However, it may be best to review the proper use of articles (a, an, the), verb tense, and comma marks in your writing. Check on the usage of the capitalization and the singular and plural forms as and when required. Please refer to my corrections, hopefully it can help you to avoid making the same mistakes in your next writing assignment. It is very important to continue to study basic English grammar and sentence construction to further improve your writing skills. Overall this was well done. Study hard and best of luck with your future online studies. Keep up the good work. Good luck!

Writing Grade:80%

　　这两个星期，公司的人都有所不安，因为家具组在工厂上门讨债，这个周三主管和厂方商谈后，厂方明显不满结果，公司门口老站着他们的人，一有机会就进来坐着不肯走，影响了我们吃中饭和上厕所。希望公司能尽快解决这个问题，平息这次事件，好让来顶替C的人顺利通过面试，尽快补上空缺。

Dear Owner, I am interested in your car which you have placed (I(x))(>>in)the advertising on newspaper today. I like that car, but I am wondering for (PR)(>>about)the price, you know,(PH)(>>as) your price is higher than other second-hand cars which(I(x))(>>is) in similar style. Would you consider giving me a ten percent discount? If you did so, I would buy it, further more, in cash! Looking forward to your prompt reply. Hope to see you soon! Best Regards, Katherine

Teacher's comment:

Your passage was very clearly written today, and you've done a good job in keeping it simple. Have a great time! You did well in keeping your writing simple and short. Check out the proper usage of the essentials like, verb tense, phraseology, part of speech, word order and article, preposition for better formation of sentences and to gain better grades as you progress. Please review my corrections and work on them. Good luck with future assignments. Happy writing - Martin.

The 'net tour' for unti 3 is learning more tips for negotiation. EF provide a website link The Negotiator Magazine, and it seems very useful for me.

1, Develop "negotiation consciousness".
2, Become a good listener.
3, Be prepared.
4, Aim high.
5, Be patient.
6, Focus on satisfaction.
7, Don't make the first move.
8, Don't accept the first offer.
9, Don't make unilateral concessions.
10, Brodow's Law: Always be willing to walk away!

I checked 10 tips based on my negotiation skill, I did most of them! Cheer up! ^_^

The topic of unit 2 is "the milestones in my life":

One of the most important events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job. Why is it so meaningful for me? First of all, I believe it is the cornerstone for the lines of trade which I will be in. I prefer to work (I(x))(>>with)what I like or what I am interested in, instead of what I have to. Secondly, working means that I am not a little girl anymore, no one could protect me (I(x))(>>such)as my parents or friends in a company, I have responsibilities for what I do as a real woman. Finally, I earn my salary indeed!

Here is the comment from my teacher:

"Thank you for telling me about your important milestone, your first job. Your writing is well developed and easy to read. You are using vocabulary that is appropriate to the topic and level. Please take care with your spelling. This is a simple mistake that can easily be corrected and help to advance your writing to the next level. Please be sure to use a spellcheck program whenever possible. events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job The other errors that you made were minor and will quickly be improved with more practice of this kind. Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Keep up the good work."

　　C果然辞职了，对我们组来说是少了一个有经验的人，但对于我和经理来说，是少了一个让人担心的人，可能就象Q所说的：好不容易去掉了一块瘀血。C是个聪明的人，也肯干，只是想法与常人不太一样，而且固执，让上头头痛了几回。

　　现在我的任务是尽快厘清她手头上的东西，尽早接手，把存在的问题尽早发现。苦恼在现在W还不是很让人放心，她自己手头上的货好不容易差不多走完了，如果现在让她接手C的烫芋，不知道能否胜任，就算最后出了差错，她极有可能赖在C头上，这是我不愿意看见的。

Canton Fair holds in Guangzhou, China, twise (SP)(>>twice )per (x>>y)(>>a)year. As a merchandiser who must attend (VT)(>>attends )the fair, I must to face the terrible traffic jam everytime(SP)(>>every time). Although the quantity of texi (SP)(>>taxi )has increased in last few years, but it is not useful to solve traffic problum (SP)(>>problem )for over 130,000 visitors. And this is the reason why more and more people are willing to take the subway instead of taking(AR)(>>a) taxi. What my opinion to solve this problum (SP)(>>problem )is, increasing the shuttle bus.

The red words are made by teacher.

　　昨天真是折磨人！错，错，都是错！

　　一大早就收到ALEX电话说SAM好象没上火车，后来才知道是搞错了，SAM其实早就离开了酒店。

　　我在东站从GLORIA/MICHELLE手中接到SAM后就开始了一天的行程，到了下午大家都很累了。我们和PHEOBE在旧馆接头，然后由虎门那家酒店的人接应我们到达shuttle bus里。到此为止，我的任务已经完成了。

　　到了七点多的时候，麻烦事情终于上演了。PHEOBE打电话给我说我弄错了SAM的酒店，他们不在虎门了，在长安的酒店。于是我在电话里确认给他们知道SAM的酒店其实没有错，错的是SIMON告诉我PHEOB和SAM住同一家，以至于我把她们也一起送到了虎门，而PHEOBE以为我弄错了，自己把SAM送到了长安。

　　好戏还在后头，当我叫PHEOBE把SAM送回虎门，好让和SAM同酒店的GLORIA带他明早一起去新馆时，我们才知道GLORIA/MICHELLE不和他同一家酒店，即我手头上他们的酒店BOOKING FOAM是错误的！！我的天！最后，我帮SAM取消了虎门的酒店，让他们一起住长安。

　　这场好戏完全影响了我的形象，让我在众人面前象个傻瓜！！而且是经理们的面前，而错不在我！唉！今年真是不顺呀！不过，终于今天把他安全送走了。他是个很nice的人。

　　今天终于大出血买了英孚一年的课程，一万多呀！幸亏基金里赚了不少，所以我把这次“出血”叫做“再投资”！蚂蚁叫我从今以后“节衣缩食”，其实最主要是“节衣”啦。从我最近想买的那部MP４算起，先扣１５００元。加油！！

　　今天的经历好象面试哦！先是象在灵格风一样在电脑上做做题，结果成绩最好的是语法，有８０分，最差的是听力和阅读，只有各４０分，综合起来也才６８分，但已经可以从７到８级学起了；而蚂蚁也只是相关三分。再接着就由SALES开始介绍EF，让我们有个大致的了解。当我确认我会买这个课程后，一位叫PHILLIP的讲师来到小房间里，开始“面试”。我才真正领教到蚂蚁的口语水平，他的比我讲得流利多了，词汇量也大，只是口音有点模糊。最搞笑的是我用"banana"形容PHILLIP，因为他是生长在苏格兰的香港人，不会中文，他和蚂蚁只懂用"abc"或者"bbc"来形容这种人，他们还是第一次知道也可以用这个单词，PHILLIP不喜欢我用这个单词来形容他，便他们听了我解释后都大笑不止！

Sam will go to GZ for Canton Fair on 25th, and no one from SPP HK will go with him. Simon called to me these two days for Sam's safe. Headache...

      什么是“S”计划，如果你不知道这个新兴詞，你就OUT了。这个计划是针对现代人压力大而设计的用六个以S为首字母为目标的，大家一起来实现吧！

Sleep better
be Strong in both mind and better
become Slim
Smile confidently
have a Sunny heart
Smart adds your charms

　　今天是广交会的第二天，下午和LIANNE一起到新馆做LOCK的SOURCING。结果令我们很失望，毫无新东西，摆LOCK的对摊位与其它五金工具的摊位比起来少得可怜，而且大多数都是铜和铁的挂锁，极少千层锁和密码锁，好不容易看到一家有点儿样子的，价格却高得惊人，LIANNE说对方报的价格是我们的卖价，呵呵，难怪的，是中山的工厂。或者就象她说得一样，做锁的都是小工厂，很少在广交会上摆。

　　Same Store Sales (SSS) - 同店销售是以销售店开了至少一年为前提，是指同一间销售店在相同时期下的销售额，通常以月份，季度为时间段比较每年的销售额。SSS可以衡量一家零售店在相对固定的运营成本下的盈利或亏损。这是一项衡量零售商投资回报的重要指标，反过来也将反映零售商的整体盈利能力。