K的工作与学习

For type of treatment which should be available in our new healthcare scheme, my comment is as below:(x>>y)(>>The following is my comment regarding health treatment in our new healthcare scheme. )
I suggest using (VT)(>>to use)alternative treatment. The reason is very simple, the most (x>>y)(>>. Most of)of (I(x))(>>the)employee (PL)(>>employees)is Chinese in our company, and these employees would accept the alternative medicine easier than the western medicine. For example, in our city, more and more people would like to go to massage parlor and have finger-pressing massage. Massage becomes popular that people believe it can (VT)(>>does )not only treating (VT)(>>treat)some of diseases, but (I(x))(>>it)also reducing (VT)(>>reduces)stress from job, family, (I(x))(>>matters, and)ect(SP)(>>etc).

Overall Teacher Comments

Dear Student, Thank you for submitting your writing. The content of your writing is good and interesting to read. However, it may be best to review the proper use of articles (a, an, the), verb tense, and comma marks in your writing. Check on the usage of the capitalization and the singular and plural forms as and when required. Please refer to my corrections, hopefully it can help you to avoid making the same mistakes in your next writing assignment. It is very important to continue to study basic English grammar and sentence construction to further improve your writing skills. Overall this was well done. Study hard and best of luck with your future online studies. Keep up the good work. Good luck!

Writing Grade:80%

Dear Owner, I am interested in your car which you have placed (I(x))(>>in)the advertising on newspaper today. I like that car, but I am wondering for (PR)(>>about)the price, you know,(PH)(>>as) your price is higher than other second-hand cars which(I(x))(>>is) in similar style. Would you consider giving me a ten percent discount? If you did so, I would buy it, further more, in cash! Looking forward to your prompt reply. Hope to see you soon! Best Regards, Katherine

Teacher's comment:

Your passage was very clearly written today, and you've done a good job in keeping it simple. Have a great time! You did well in keeping your writing simple and short. Check out the proper usage of the essentials like, verb tense, phraseology, part of speech, word order and article, preposition for better formation of sentences and to gain better grades as you progress. Please review my corrections and work on them. Good luck with future assignments. Happy writing - Martin.

The topic of unit 2 is "the milestones in my life":

One of the most important events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job. Why is it so meaningful for me? First of all, I believe it is the cornerstone for the lines of trade which I will be in. I prefer to work (I(x))(>>with)what I like or what I am interested in, instead of what I have to. Secondly, working means that I am not a little girl anymore, no one could protect me (I(x))(>>such)as my parents or friends in a company, I have responsibilities for what I do as a real woman. Finally, I earn my salary indeed!

Here is the comment from my teacher:

"Thank you for telling me about your important milestone, your first job. Your writing is well developed and easy to read. You are using vocabulary that is appropriate to the topic and level. Please take care with your spelling. This is a simple mistake that can easily be corrected and help to advance your writing to the next level. Please be sure to use a spellcheck program whenever possible. events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job The other errors that you made were minor and will quickly be improved with more practice of this kind. Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Keep up the good work."

Canton Fair holds in Guangzhou, China, twise (SP)(>>twice )per (x>>y)(>>a)year. As a merchandiser who must attend (VT)(>>attends )the fair, I must to face the terrible traffic jam everytime(SP)(>>every time). Although the quantity of texi (SP)(>>taxi )has increased in last few years, but it is not useful to solve traffic problum (SP)(>>problem )for over 130,000 visitors. And this is the reason why more and more people are willing to take the subway instead of taking(AR)(>>a) taxi. What my opinion to solve this problum (SP)(>>problem )is, increasing the shuttle bus.

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