Teacher's comment:

Your passage was very clearly written today, and you've done a good job in keeping it simple. Have a great time! You did well in keeping your writing simple and short. Check out the proper usage of the essentials like, verb tense, phraseology, part of speech, word order and article, preposition for better formation of sentences and to gain better grades as you progress. Please review my corrections and work on them. Good luck with future assignments. Happy writing - Martin.

1, Develop "negotiation consciousness".
2, Become a good listener.
3, Be prepared.
4, Aim high.
5, Be patient.
6, Focus on satisfaction.
7, Don't make the first move.
8, Don't accept the first offer.
9, Don't make unilateral concessions.
10, Brodow's Law: Always be willing to walk away!

I checked 10 tips based on my negotiation skill, I did most of them! Cheer up! ^_^

One of the most important events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job. Why is it so meaningful for me? First of all, I believe it is the cornerstone for the lines of trade which I will be in. I prefer to work (I(x))(>>with)what I like or what I am interested in, instead of what I have to. Secondly, working means that I am not a little girl anymore, no one could protect me (I(x))(>>such)as my parents or friends in a company, I have responsibilities for what I do as a real woman. Finally, I earn my salary indeed!

Here is the comment from my teacher:

"Thank you for telling me about your important milestone, your first job. Your writing is well developed and easy to read. You are using vocabulary that is appropriate to the topic and level. Please take care with your spelling. This is a simple mistake that can easily be corrected and help to advance your writing to the next level. Please be sure to use a spellcheck program whenever possible. events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job The other errors that you made were minor and will quickly be improved with more practice of this kind. Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Keep up the good work."

　　现在我的任务是尽快厘清她手头上的东西，尽早接手，把存在的问题尽早发现。苦恼在现在W还不是很让人放心，她自己手头上的货好不容易差不多走完了，如果现在让她接手C的烫芋，不知道能否胜任，就算最后出了差错，她极有可能赖在C头上，这是我不愿意看见的。

The red words are made by teacher.

　　一大早就收到ALEX电话说SAM好象没上火车，后来才知道是搞错了，SAM其实早就离开了酒店。

　　我在东站从GLORIA/MICHELLE手中接到SAM后就开始了一天的行程，到了下午大家都很累了。我们和PHEOBE在旧馆接头，然后由虎门那家酒店的人接应我们到达shuttle bus里。到此为止，我的任务已经完成了。

　　到了七点多的时候，麻烦事情终于上演了。PHEOBE打电话给我说我弄错了SAM的酒店，他们不在虎门了，在长安的酒店。于是我在电话里确认给他们知道SAM的酒店其实没有错，错的是SIMON告诉我PHEOB和SAM住同一家，以至于我把她们也一起送到了虎门，而PHEOBE以为我弄错了，自己把SAM送到了长安。

　　好戏还在后头，当我叫PHEOBE把SAM送回虎门，好让和SAM同酒店的GLORIA带他明早一起去新馆时，我们才知道GLORIA/MICHELLE不和他同一家酒店，即我手头上他们的酒店BOOKING FOAM是错误的！！我的天！最后，我帮SAM取消了虎门的酒店，让他们一起住长安。

　　这场好戏完全影响了我的形象，让我在众人面前象个傻瓜！！而且是经理们的面前，而错不在我！唉！今年真是不顺呀！不过，终于今天把他安全送走了。他是个很nice的人。

　　今天的经历好象面试哦！先是象在灵格风一样在电脑上做做题，结果成绩最好的是语法，有８０分，最差的是听力和阅读，只有各４０分，综合起来也才６８分，但已经可以从７到８级学起了；而蚂蚁也只是相关三分。再接着就由SALES开始介绍EF，让我们有个大致的了解。当我确认我会买这个课程后，一位叫PHILLIP的讲师来到小房间里，开始“面试”。我才真正领教到蚂蚁的口语水平，他的比我讲得流利多了，词汇量也大，只是口音有点模糊。最搞笑的是我用"banana"形容PHILLIP，因为他是生长在苏格兰的香港人，不会中文，他和蚂蚁只懂用"abc"或者"bbc"来形容这种人，他们还是第一次知道也可以用这个单词，PHILLIP不喜欢我用这个单词来形容他，便他们听了我解释后都大笑不止！