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For type of treatment which should be available in our new healthcare scheme, my comment is as below:(x>>y)(>>The following is my comment regarding health treatment in our new healthcare scheme. )
I suggest using (VT)(>>to use)alternative treatment. The reason is very simple, the most (x>>y)(>>. Most of)of (I(x))(>>the)employee (PL)(>>employees)is Chinese in our company, and these employees would accept the alternative medicine easier than the western medicine. For example, in our city, more and more people would like to go to massage parlor and have finger-pressing massage. Massage becomes popular that people believe it can (VT)(>>does )not only treating (VT)(>>treat)some of diseases, but (I(x))(>>it)also reducing (VT)(>>reduces)stress from job, family, (I(x))(>>matters, and)ect(SP)(>>etc).

Overall Teacher Comments

Dear Student, Thank you for submitting your writing. The content of your writing is good and interesting to read. However, it may be best to review the proper use of articles (a, an, the), verb tense, and comma marks in your writing. Check on the usage of the capitalization and the singular and plural forms as and when required. Please refer to my corrections, hopefully it can help you to avoid making the same mistakes in your next writing assignment. It is very important to continue to study basic English grammar and sentence construction to further improve your writing skills. Overall this was well done. Study hard and best of luck with your future online studies. Keep up the good work. Good luck!

Writing Grade:80%