K的工作与学习

For type of treatment which should be available in our new healthcare scheme, my comment is as below:(x>>y)(>>The following is my comment regarding health treatment in our new healthcare scheme. )
I suggest using (VT)(>>to use)alternative treatment. The reason is very simple, the most (x>>y)(>>. Most of)of (I(x))(>>the)employee (PL)(>>employees)is Chinese in our company, and these employees would accept the alternative medicine easier than the western medicine. For example, in our city, more and more people would like to go to massage parlor and have finger-pressing massage. Massage becomes popular that people believe it can (VT)(>>does )not only treating (VT)(>>treat)some of diseases, but (I(x))(>>it)also reducing (VT)(>>reduces)stress from job, family, (I(x))(>>matters, and)ect(SP)(>>etc).

Overall Teacher Comments

Dear Student, Thank you for submitting your writing. The content of your writing is good and interesting to read. However, it may be best to review the proper use of articles (a, an, the), verb tense, and comma marks in your writing. Check on the usage of the capitalization and the singular and plural forms as and when required. Please refer to my corrections, hopefully it can help you to avoid making the same mistakes in your next writing assignment. It is very important to continue to study basic English grammar and sentence construction to further improve your writing skills. Overall this was well done. Study hard and best of luck with your future online studies. Keep up the good work. Good luck!

Writing Grade:80%

Dear Owner, I am interested in your car which you have placed (I(x))(>>in)the advertising on newspaper today. I like that car, but I am wondering for (PR)(>>about)the price, you know,(PH)(>>as) your price is higher than other second-hand cars which(I(x))(>>is) in similar style. Would you consider giving me a ten percent discount? If you did so, I would buy it, further more, in cash! Looking forward to your prompt reply. Hope to see you soon! Best Regards, Katherine

Teacher's comment:

Your passage was very clearly written today, and you've done a good job in keeping it simple. Have a great time! You did well in keeping your writing simple and short. Check out the proper usage of the essentials like, verb tense, phraseology, part of speech, word order and article, preposition for better formation of sentences and to gain better grades as you progress. Please review my corrections and work on them. Good luck with future assignments. Happy writing - Martin.

The 'net tour' for unti 3 is learning more tips for negotiation. EF provide a website link The Negotiator Magazine, and it seems very useful for me.

1, Develop "negotiation consciousness".
2, Become a good listener.
3, Be prepared.
4, Aim high.
5, Be patient.
6, Focus on satisfaction.
7, Don't make the first move.
8, Don't accept the first offer.
9, Don't make unilateral concessions.
10, Brodow's Law: Always be willing to walk away!

I checked 10 tips based on my negotiation skill, I did most of them! Cheer up! ^_^

The topic of unit 2 is "the milestones in my life":

One of the most important events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job. Why is it so meaningful for me? First of all, I believe it is the cornerstone for the lines of trade which I will be in. I prefer to work (I(x))(>>with)what I like or what I am interested in, instead of what I have to. Secondly, working means that I am not a little girl anymore, no one could protect me (I(x))(>>such)as my parents or friends in a company, I have responsibilities for what I do as a real woman. Finally, I earn my salary indeed!

Here is the comment from my teacher:

"Thank you for telling me about your important milestone, your first job. Your writing is well developed and easy to read. You are using vocabulary that is appropriate to the topic and level. Please take care with your spelling. This is a simple mistake that can easily be corrected and help to advance your writing to the next level. Please be sure to use a spellcheck program whenever possible. events in my lift (SP)(>>life)is my first job The other errors that you made were minor and will quickly be improved with more practice of this kind. Overall, this was an excellent piece of writing. Keep up the good work."

Canton Fair holds in Guangzhou, China, twise (SP)(>>twice )per (x>>y)(>>a)year. As a merchandiser who must attend (VT)(>>attends )the fair, I must to face the terrible traffic jam everytime(SP)(>>every time). Although the quantity of texi (SP)(>>taxi )has increased in last few years, but it is not useful to solve traffic problum (SP)(>>problem )for over 130,000 visitors. And this is the reason why more and more people are willing to take the subway instead of taking(AR)(>>a) taxi. What my opinion to solve this problum (SP)(>>problem )is, increasing the shuttle bus.

The red words are made by teacher.

　　今天终于大出血买了英孚一年的课程，一万多呀！幸亏基金里赚了不少，所以我把这次“出血”叫做“再投资”！蚂蚁叫我从今以后“节衣缩食”，其实最主要是“节衣”啦。从我最近想买的那部MP４算起，先扣１５００元。加油！！

　　今天的经历好象面试哦！先是象在灵格风一样在电脑上做做题，结果成绩最好的是语法，有８０分，最差的是听力和阅读，只有各４０分，综合起来也才６８分，但已经可以从７到８级学起了；而蚂蚁也只是相关三分。再接着就由SALES开始介绍EF，让我们有个大致的了解。当我确认我会买这个课程后，一位叫PHILLIP的讲师来到小房间里，开始“面试”。我才真正领教到蚂蚁的口语水平，他的比我讲得流利多了，词汇量也大，只是口音有点模糊。最搞笑的是我用"banana"形容PHILLIP，因为他是生长在苏格兰的香港人，不会中文，他和蚂蚁只懂用"abc"或者"bbc"来形容这种人，他们还是第一次知道也可以用这个单词，PHILLIP不喜欢我用这个单词来形容他，便他们听了我解释后都大笑不止！